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From : naiveCRIMSON
To : Greg
Date : 2008-02-04 08:16
Title : PR/QC test answers.
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The following are my test answers for the PR portion of the Negima manga. The OC portion was not included.



Page 1:
Lacks a '!' in the sixth column, after 'Kun'.

Page 2:
'An Old Rivals Vow' - 'An Old Rival's vow'
There should be a '!' after 'Ye--s' in the first column.
Second column - a ',' after 'up'.
The little note: after 'countries', there should be a '!'.
Third column, sentence structure. Change to - 'It's really wonderful....'
There should be a '!' after 'resort' in the third column.
(Is there something missing from the speech bubble in the third column, to the left?)
Fourth column, after 'Iya', there should be a '!'.
After 'us' in the fourth column, it should not be a '---', instead a '!'
There should be a period after the word 'alcohols' in the fourth column.
Fifth column, right speech bubble, sentence structure - 'Thanks to this resort that stretches one actual hour to seem like a day!'
Fifth column, speech bubble to the right should have a '!' at the end.
Fifth column, 'that have a whole..' should be 'who have a whole...'
Fifth column, speech bubble to the left should have a period at the end.
Sixth column, 'its' should be changed to 'it's'.
'Double your day' in the sixth column should have a '!' at the end.
'Teachering' should be changed to 'teaching'.
Change the '---' in the seventh column to '...'.

Page 3:
Third column - 'Sure are taking it easy, those people.'
Third column - 'Those two are supposed to be participating in the tournament too.'
Fourth column - 'Tomorrow's', instead of 'tomorow'.

Page 4:
Second column, there should be a '?' at the end of the right speech bubble.
Right speech bubble - 'Because spells without incantation are basics for magical swordsmen.'
Right speech bubble, period after 'form'.
Third speech column- 'Unleashing Cantus...' add 'unleashing'.
Fourth speech column, a period after 'ki'.
Fourth speech column, a period after 'root'.
Fifth column, period after 'body'.
Fifth column, to the left, after 'everyone', it should be a period.
Speech bubble, after 'things', there should be a period.
Speech bubble, after 'about', there should be a period.

Page 5:
First column, 'rigorous trainings' should be 'rigorous training'.
'also exists' - 'also exist.'
'that kind of confusing talk' - 'that kind of talk is confusing'.
Second column - after 'thirty minutes', there should be a ','.
After 'you', there should be a period.
Third column, after 'masters', there should be a period.
Fourth column, 'wasnt' change to 'wasn't'.
'... incantations' should have a '!' after it.

Page 6:
'Then I have 9 shots' should probably be 'But I have 9 shots'.
'There hands' - 'Their hands'
'Suprised' - 'surprised'
'Fighting ways to' - 'Fighting ways too'
After 'too', there should be a period.
'Your magic powered' should be 'your magically powered'.
'Body strengthening' should be 'Body's strengthening'
A period after 'bad'.
A period after 'line'.
'Than there's no' - 'then there's no'
Period after 'master' in the last column.

Page 7:
First column, right speech bubble, after 'bunshins', there should be a ','.
Second column, where Negi speaks, the '"' and '?' should be swopped around.
'foots' - 'feet'
'For you, it's...' - Insert a 'your' after 'it's'.
'awsome' - 'awesome'
'looks' - 'looked'
For the Note: portion, 'mutiple bodies actually materialize'.
Second last column, after 'too', there should be a period.
Second last column, after 'move' and 'foot', there should come '!' and not '---?'
Last column, there should be a '!' after 'contractor'.

Page 8:
There should not be a '----' in the first speech bubble.
'Can't do anything!' instead of 'can't do anything---'
'Magic duelist too!' instead of 'magic duelist too---'
'Regardless of...' should be changed to 'Not regarding Captain....'
Remove the 'thats' in the second column, left speech bubble.
'We've been only' should be changed to 'We've only been'.
'... at all---' should be changed to 'at all!'
'caught sneaking in...' There should be a ',' after 'in'.
'I my own fighting style' - 'I have my own fighting style'
Fifth column, there should be a period after 'situation'.
There should be a '!' after 'Niiice'.
Sixth column, 'How is that old man' - 'How about that old man'
Seventh column, 'how is he strong' should be changed to 'how strong is he'.
'I have dropped out of being a mage' - 'I have dropped out from being a mage.'

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From : naiveCRIMSON
To : Greg
Date : 2008-02-04 08:19
Title : PR/QC test answers. -continued-
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Page 9:
'There's' should be changed to 'there was'.
After 'bare hands' in the first column, there should be a period.
For the little text in the first column, it should be 'That's amazing.'
Second column, after 'that', there should be a period, same as after 'powers'.
Second column, 'yesterday preliminary' - 'yesterday's preliminary'
'assume that half-cooked' - 'assumed that half-cooked'
After 'him' in the third column, there should be a period.
In the fourth column, the '---' should be changed to '...'.
Third column, there should be a '!' after 'try'.
Fourth column, there should be a period after 'victory'.
'It's dangerous' should be changed to 'Isn't it dangerous?'
After 'OK', there should be a ',' in the last column.

Page 10:
The ',' in the first column, first speech bubble after the 'G' should be changed to a '.'.
There should be a period after 'punches' in the sixth column.
In the sixth column, speech bubble to the left, there should be a ',' after 'obvious'.
After 'walls', there should be a period.
Seventh column, there should be a period after 'shots'.
Seventh column, 'originaly' should be 'originally'.
There should be ',' after the 'originally'.
A period after the second speech bubble's 'shot'.
Last column, 'disarm' - 'disarming spells'.
'summon lower spirits' should be changed to 'summoning of lower spirits'.
'none have.. powers' should be changed to 'none of them have attack powers'.
There should be a period after 'calm down', and after 'mages'.

Page 11:
After the 'it comes out... (0.3SEC)', it should be a '.'.
All of the instructions require a period at the end. (=.=")
'As far as I see' should be changed to ' as far as I can see'.
After 'battle' in the speech bubble of the first column, there should be a period.
After 'likes' in the speech bubble of the first column, there should be a period.
Second column, there should be a period after 'order' and 'hope'.
'Wouldn't hurt to have some confidence' should be changed to, 'it can't hurt to have some confidence'.
There should be a '!' after 'Kotaro-kun'.

Page 12:
First column, after 'resort' should be a period.
Second column, after 'you', there should be a period.
'perperation' - change to 'preparation'.
'Huh... training' - 'Huh, he wanted to learn fighting techniques within one month of training'
After 'absurd', there should be a period.
Following in the same speech bubble, 'smooth' should be capitalized, and a period should be at the end.
'Simpily' - 'Simply'
There should be period after 'foundations'.
Fourth column, there should be a period after 'hands'.
There should be a ',' after 'strengths' in the next speech bubble in the fourth column.
Fifth column, there should be a period after 'me'.
Sixth column, a period after 'matter' as well as after 'today'.

Page 13:
SFX: 'explanitions' - 'explanations'
First column, there should be a period after 'apprentice'.
Second column, there should be a ',' after 'very much'.
Second column, there should be a period after 'thank me'.
'Don't loose' - Change to 'Don't lose'
Third column, period after 'facing me'.
Period after 'apprentice' in the third column.
Fourth column, period after 'person'.
Second last column, period after 'my bad'.
'Lets' - Change to 'let's'.
'They really nice' - change to 'they're really nice'

Page 14:
'Student uniform..' - Add a 'the' before the 'student uniform'.
Add a '!' after 'student uniform'.
Second column speech bubble, 'that though' should have a ',' before 'though'.
'Clothings' should be 'clothing'.
Last column, there should be a period after 'first'.
There should be a '!' after 'now'.

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From : naiveCRIMSON
To : Greg
Date : 2008-02-04 08:21
Title : PR/QC test answers. -continued-
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Page 15:
'Kota-Kun... either' - 'Kota-Kun, you don't have any parents either!?'
There should be a period after 'child'.
There should be a '!' after 'Don't call me Kota-kun'.
'Well, it's obvious that I.... neither...' - Change 'neither' to 'either'.
Period after 'tribes'.
I don't... friends'. - 'I don't really have any people that I can call friends either'
Period after 'either'.
Though - Change to 'through'.
Period after 'jobs'.
Fourth column, after 'Negi-kun', there should be a '!'.
'There is tears' - Change the 'is' to 'are'
There should be a '!' after Negi-kun in the last speech bubble in the fourth column.
Second last column, there should be a period after 'enemies'.

Page 16:
'I want to fight with a strong like you' - 'I want to fight with a strong person like you'

Page 17:
Definately - Definitely (x2) First and second last columns.
There should be a '!' after 'today'.
There should be a period after 'final' in the first column.
There should be a period after the 'yeah' in the second column.
There should be a period after the 'can' in the second column, second speech bubble.
'This kind of time' should be changed to 'In this kind of situation'.
'... haven't you' should be changed to 'have you' in the second last column.
In regards - With regards
Thats - That's
After the 'get along', there should be a '!'.
'Whole different thing' - 'entirely different thing'




That's all that I found. =D
Thanks!

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